The autumn season in small towns across northeastern
Oklahoma is unique to most other areas. There is a faint chill in the October
air, as the skies become orange at dusk, matching the color of the falling
leaves that canvas the ground. At sunset on Friday nights, the sky becomes
illuminated with stadium lights and the whistles from referees almost drown out
the occasional moos of the nearby grazing cattle. Football is a lifestyle in
these towns across Oklahoma, and that lifestyle reaches its apex during the
homecoming game.
Homecoming
is the week that is filled with school pride, class reunions, the football game,
and, of course, the homecoming dance after the game. For Bobby Brown, a highly-touted
running back for the Quapaw, Oklahoma high school football team, homecoming was
the week to showcase his talents to the many college scouts in attendance. Bobby
had already been on pace for a historic season, leading the state in rushing
yards and leading his team to an unbeaten record. He was the talk of the town
amongst the old men in the local coffee shop, as Bobby was nearly unstoppable. But
this week, this game was different. There was somebody other than the college
scouts that he needed to impress.
Alyssa
Jones was a senior captain of the cheer team. She had long, blonde hair and a
captivating smile to match her engaging personality. For Bobby, the ultimate
goal was to attend the homecoming dance with Alyssa. But Alyssa was not going
to attend with just anybody.
“What can I do to convince you to go to homecoming with me?”
Bobby asked.
“Well, Bobby, I really wasn’t planning on going. Buying a
dress and getting ready after the late game is such a hassle. But, I’ll tell
you what. If you rush for 200 yards and 2 touchdowns this week, then I will go
with you to the dance,” said Alyssa.
“Consider it done,” Bobby replied confidently.
In reality,
this seemed almost impossible to Bobby. They were facing the toughest defense in
the state this week. Besides, he had only topped 200 yards rushing once in his
playing career. But Bobby knew what he had to do to impress Alyssa.
That Friday
night, night fell and the kickoff whistle blew. Bobby started off hot, rushing
for 60 yards and a touchdown on the opening drive of the game. But the opposing
defense started adjusting as the game progressed. Bobby knew this would be no
easy task. By the end of third quarter, he only had 90 yards and the one touchdown.
Alyssa knew that she would not be attending the dance, and Bobby knew that he
had to make up ground quickly. Although he was getting fatigued and beaten up
by the stout defense, Bobby knew that his team needed him. He knew that the
scouts needed him. He knew that Alyssa needed him.
With 6
minutes left in the game, Bobby finally broke free for a 60 yard touchdown
rush. The game was now tied and bobby has his two touchdowns, but still lacked 50
yards to reach 200. The defense held, and Bobby and the offense got the ball
with two minutes remaining and sixty yards to score a touchdown for the win. On
first down, the ball was snapped and handed to Bobby. He ran right for no gain,
as he was wrapped up instantly. Second down was not much better, as he gained
only two yards. Third down was his last chance. He took the handoff from the
quarter back, ran left, broke a tackle, made a man miss, and sprinted through
an arm tackle. He had done it. There was nothing but green grass ahead.
“TOUCHDOWN! WILDCATS WIN!” proclaimed the announcer.
Against all odds, Bobby finished the game with 3 touchdowns and
210 yards rushing, his best performance to date. He had completed the
challenge. The game was won, and Alyssa was going to the homecoming dance with
Bobby, the most highly recruited running back in the small school’s history.
Author's Notes: My story idea came from Part A of Gould's Divine Archer. There is a story in this section in which Rama must string Vishnu's bow in order to gain Sita's love. I wanted to use a similar story of performing an arduous task to win a love, so I changed the characters and story to a high school football player trying to win over a potential homecoming date. In my story, Bobby is the Rama character and Alyssa is the Sita. Bobby must have the best game of his playing career in order to attend the dance with Alyssa. It was no easy task, as he faced a tough opponent, but, in the end, Bobby pulled through and completed the challenge, just as Rama did, and attended to dance with his version of Sita.
Bibliography: F.J. Gould The Divine Archer
Hi Andy, your story had very good, vivid descriptions, especially at the beginning. These helped set the scene for the rest of the story. The theme of men performing arduous tasks to win love is a very prevalent in stories. What do you think it means about the way men and women relate to each other? This might be an interesting element to explore in a story like this. The way you describe the game is also very engaging. The reader can really feel Bobby's stress. Good job!
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ReplyDeleteI really like the way you detail your story. It really makes it easy to imagine your story and it got my attention for sure. I think that is one of your strong points in writing your story. It was a great modern idea that you changed the story, rather than proving love its for love. Looking forward to reading more of your stories.
Hi, Andy!
ReplyDeleteI don't really know a lot about football, but I can tell from reading your story that you do or at least you know something about it. The scene where Bobby made the touchdown was tense and very detailed. It really captured you within the story. This story had that classic boy wins girl kind of vibe. I think that you set up the scene well. It felt like Friday Night Lights, which I love. Have you seen that show or were a football player in high school? Do people on the football team prefer to date people on the cheer leading team? I think your story was a great modern retelling of Rama breaking the bow for Sita! I would have loved to see someone kind of romantic scene at the end where Alyssa and Bobby meet on the field while its pouring rain... I feel like the most romantic scenes happen when it's raining! Thanks for the great read!
Hey there Andy,
ReplyDeleteI really appreciated how detailed your story was. I really could envision myself on the field with the players. What I have noticed through reading this and many other of your stories, is that reading is definitely one of your strong points. You did a great job at making the job very engaging for the reader as well. Good Job!